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Friday, August 19, 2011

Flash Fiction Friday 8-19-11: "Delicious"

(Image this week provided by Advizor; original source and title unknown)

"Sorry about the eggs. I'm really a bit rubbish at cooking."

"Mm. I have had more palatable breakfasts."

Curls of smoke drifted up from her cigarette as she gestured, lazily. "Mind you, that could be because this isn't what I wanted for breakfast."

I raised an eyebrow. "And you did want....?"

She rolled her eyes so hard they spun round in the sockets. "You, you idiot."

I blushed like a schoolgirl, but managed to squeak out, "So, um, why don't we get you what you really wanted?"

"Why indeed?" she purred.

Your challenge for today was to use the picture above and write a flash fiction of 69-99 words. Additionally, I provided a key phrase I wanted to see used somewhere in the submission:

"...curls of [noun]..."

Nobody's checking word counts, or for the key phrase, but you're only cheating yourself if you break the rules. Unless you're doing it to earn a spanking (in which case, see me after class).

Special Bonus Director's Commentary Track:

Try as I might, I couldn't think of any other reason these two might be still nude or half-nude at the table unless they were so keen to get back to the bedroom that they hadn't bothered to dress. There is a rather pensive look on the face of the one on the right, but I consciously chose to ignore that, preferring to go with the "barely contained lust" approach. Besides, I've written too much lately that's been dark and/or turbulent and/or depressing and/or pensive. Rather have something cheerful.

This is, I think, the first thing I've posted here where I'm actually writing from the female perspective. I just can't think of the "I" in a story and have it be a female and make it seem right. Hopefully I did all right with this one. 

If you are playing along this week, please leave your link below using the widget. It will appear in the text of the post itself, not in the comments, so everyone that's playing will be listed here. This frees me from having to chase people down to find out if they're playing or update the Friday post several times for late entries. Your cooperation is appreciated.

In any case, the participants list is below. Go check them out, and thanks to all who played along.

Check back here on Monday for the next challenge! And if you have any photos or artwork you'd like to see in a future challenge, please send them my way. Thanks to Advizor for this week's photo!

-- PB


Anonymous said...

A lovely job Panser!

Anonymous said...

Is it wrong that I now crave eggs?

Anonymous said...

I'm glad they got it clear on what she REALLY wanted. ;-)

France said...

You make a lovely lady! I can picture the attitude when she says "mind you...".

I thought the challenge was "curl", not "curls". Yes, I'm anal like that. ;)

Topaz said...

I would find it only fair to make up for the bad breakfast :-)


So I've FINALLY got my act together and participated! I hope to make it a regular thing. You have permission to spank me if I miss a few too many ;-)

The Panserbjørne said...

Wordwytch: Thanks!

Pocket RockettZ: Eh, I don't know. I guess if it made you hungry in one way, that's a good thing?

Sweets: Of course! Doesn't do to leave that sort of wanting unfulfilled, you know.

France: Good, I'm glad I managed to get the "voice" right. I can write plenty of tales in third person as females, but first person is much much harder for me. (And damn, yes, you're right, it was just "curl". I guess I owe myself a spanking?)

Topaz: Delighted to have you with us at last! Welcome to the fun and I hope we'll see more deliciousness from you. Glad you enjoyed this one, too.

-- PB

Anonymous said...

Sexy, suggestive.


Anonymous said...

P.S. I thought seriously about ignoring the use of the key phrase and writing a 30 word story all so I could get a spanking. :-)

Alas, I was obedient.


Advizor54 said...

So many of us don't get what we want until we ask for it. Thanks for using my picture, it was great fun this week, but be warned, mine are dark and pensive, that's why I liked it.

Anonymous said...

Back again...

I just want to say there are so FABULOUS stories this week. So many surprises and different takes. Thanks for the great reading.


Naughty Lexi said...

I think your refusal to bow to the shadow is inspiring. Besides, it doesn't have to be grim; they could just be waking up. I look that way most mornings.

Red said...

Good story. Mmmmm, eggs for breakfast for me tomorrow!

Anonymous said...

I am jealous of the eggs they had... mine were boring this morning. I might have to liven up my breakfast from now on ;)