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Friday, January 28, 2011

Flash Fiction Friday 1-28-11: "Not As Expected"

(Photo source unknown)

“So how was your day, hon?” he asked, standing in the doorway, relishing her shock. “From the looks of you, it was a good one.”

She had the grace to look embarrassed. Terror warred with resignation on her face.

“No answer?” He smiled grimly and moved toward the wardrobe, opening it, revealing a busty blonde with her arms held protectively over her nudity. He jerked his thumb at the door. “Out.”

She stumbled out of the room, sneaking frightened glances over her shoulder. He turned to Lauren, still huddled in the middle of the bed. “Thirty minutes to gather your things,” he said. “If you're not gone by then, I come after you with this.”

The shotgun's "click-clack" rang and echoed, promising blood.

Your challenge for today was to use the picture above and write a flash fiction of 93-129 words. Additionally, I provided a key phrase I wanted to see used somewhere in the submission:

"...held protectively..."

Nobody's checking word counts, or for the key phrase, but you're only cheating yourself if you break the rules. Unless you're doing it to earn a spanking (in which case, see me after class).

Special Bonus Director's Commentary Track:

I think the expectation with a picture like this is the typical porn movie scenario: if a guy comes home and finds his woman cheating on him with another woman, he's supposed to be delighted rather than upset, and happily join in, or at least watch them ravage each other. That's definitely a happier outcome (and I like to think it's how I would react), but what about those to whom trust is everything? The ones with whom a breach of confidence is enough to cause irreparable damage? To someone like that, I thought, it wouldn't make a damn bit of difference whether his girlfriend was fucking another man or another woman. And so, rather than follow the "let's all get naked and have fun" path, I went with the more depressing and bitter one. I rather hope most of you came up with something more delectable.

Massive bonus points for anyone who can identify what movie I stole the title phrase from. 

The following people are participating this week. Go check out their take on this FFF, won't you, and thank 'em for playing along.

Oversexed Librarian:
MarQe:  (MarQe is a newcomer to FFF; go say welcome)
Check back here on Monday for the next challenge! And if you have any photos or artwork you'd like to see in a future challenge, please send them my way.

Please note: I will be trying an experiment for next Friday. Rather than gather a participants list via email / comments, I'll be using a widget which allows participants to leave their links at the end of my Friday post to let everyone else know they've participated. That way it doesn't matter if you decide to participate at the last second, or if you forget to contact me ahead of time. Just leave your link on the post and you'll be set. The Friday post will go up at 12:01 AM.

-- PB


Anonymous said...

and you say I'm dark ;) lovely bit this week Panser!

Dioneo said...

Wow, interesting take, PB! I do hope the two ladies are able to use their charms to negotiate an amicable settlement.

Oversexed Librarian said...

Whoa, PB. That's a take on the pic that never occurred to me...but you made it work.

Anonymous said...

Whoa! Very serious but very valid and real reaction. I liked your take on this photo.

I need a clue about the movie quote...

Drenchxoxo said...

Ohhh I like the serious path you took on this.

I too need help on the movie quote.

I hope to be joining in the FFF fun next week.

Naughty Lexi said...

Thank god for someone who realizes this. All of this. It's cheating whether it's man, woman, or robot. Not exactly the most wonderful outcome, but I'm entirely for it nonetheless.

Anonymous said...

A very nice "dark" side, and the shotgun was a sweet touch.

No clue about the movie.

Cheeky Minx said...

Oh my... I've always enjoyed your forays into your dark side, PB.

Much like the others, I have no ideas on the origins of the film quote. I'm guessing it's not Bergman or Antonioni... ;P

David said...

Harsh, harsh, harsh, nicely done tale, and as others have said, a unique take on the seed. Of course the issue is all to prevalent and as pointed out, no matter what side of the violation you are on there are consequences.

The Panserbjørne said...

Sephani: I don't think this is particularly dark; I could just as easily have had him ravage both of them in a much more disturbing way. This way they at least get to keep their skins. Maybe it is dark, though; I'm hardly the best judge of my own work.

Dioneo: I'm glad you found it so! I did think it was an interesting way to look at things and am glad most people are enjoying it.

Oversexed Librarian: I think it caught most of you off guard, which must mean I'm doing something right. Thanks!

Sweets: I'm glad you liked it! The phrase "Not as expected" came from the Robert De Niro film "The Score". I'll elaborate via email if you like.

Drenchxoxo: Thanks, I'm happy it was to your liking. The quote (a bit short, really) came from the Robert De Niro film "The Score".

Lexi: Definitely cheating, unless both parties are completely open to it up front. And they weren't, in this case (obviously).

Rozewolf: Glad you liked it! The quote is from the De Niro/Norton film "The Score", a bit too obscure for everyone, apparently.

Minx: I hadn't thought it to be particularly dark, but your comment along with Sephani's are making me reconsider. Maybe it really is. The movie quote was apparently me being too clever, as nobody tagged as being from the De Niro heist movie "The Score".

David: Harsh? Yes, I guess it is. But at least he's letting them keep their skins. I could have made it a lot worse but deliberately stayed away from doing so. Glad you liked.

-- PB

Topaz said...

Okay, as I'm going backwards, now I understand the link, lol. Sorry for jumping ahead.

I like your take on this piece. I admire you for taking the path which we fear rather than the one that delights us. And boy does it ever pack a punch.

The Panserbjørne said...

Topaz: I do try to write punchy pieces whenever I can. If I can write something that really impacts hard, I think I've hit my mark. Glad you liked it!

-- PB